写作范文解析

双边类大作文，犯罪类话题

Some people think all lawbreakers should be sent to prison, while others think there are better alternatives for those whose crimes are minor, such as making them do work for the local community.  Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

题目来源：2023年11月18日大陆雅思大作文（重复2013年2月16日大陆考题）

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题目大意

一些人认为所有违法者都应该被送进监狱，而另一些人则认为，对于那些罪行较轻的人有更好的选择，比如让他们为当地社区工作。讨论这双方观点并给出自己的看法。

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思路解析

这是一道双边类大作文，聊的是惩罚罪犯的方式。双边类大作文，需要对每个观点分别表达同意或反对，较终的结论就是我的立场，可以是中立（双方都同意或都反对），也可以是单边支持某一方立场。审题时注意两点，一是前者观点包含了绝 对词“all”，一般遇到绝 对化表达，从反对角度切入会更好写。二是后者观点中涉及一个例子“work for the local community”，这个需要在推文中涉及。

首先来看前者观点的合理性，有两方面。

一是坚持严厉的法律制裁能有效威慑潜在的犯罪行为。当人们知道违法行为必然导致监禁，他们更可能遵守法律。

二是监禁能够保护社会安全。通过监禁违法者，可以直接从社会中移除可能的威胁，减少他们对公众安全和秩序的危害。

再来看后者观点的合理性，有三方面。

一是惩罚时应当考虑犯罪的复杂性和个体差异，不同的犯罪行为具有不同的严重程度和背景因素。对于轻微犯罪，应当更有效的帮助其改正和预防再犯，避免其在监狱环境学到更严重的犯罪行为，加重犯罪循环。

二是社区服务不仅可以作为对犯罪行为的惩罚，还能帮助罪犯学习新技能，增强其社会责任感，促进其积极回归社会。还可以帮助他们修复因犯罪行为而破坏的社会关系，促进社区成员间的理解和和谐。

三是能够减少监狱系统的压力。将所有犯罪者进行监禁会导致监狱人满为患，增加政府财政负担。采用社区服务等替代性措施可以有效减轻这种压力。

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高分范文示例

In contemporary society, the debate over appropriate punishments for lawbreakers is increasingly pertinent. Some advocate for incarceration for all offenses, while others propose alternatives to incarceration for minor crimes. This essay will examine both perspectives before delineating my standpoint.

Proponents of universal imprisonment argue that it serves as a powerful deterrent. The fear of losing one's freedom, they assert, can dissuade potential criminals from committing even minor offenses. Furthermore, prison is seen as a means of protecting society by removing offenders, regardless of the severity of their crime, thereby upholding law and order.

Conversely, many contend that incarceration is an excessive way to deal with non-violent and minor offenses. They propose that alternatives such as community service and monetary penalties are more proper in this context. This not only alleviates the burden on the prison system but also offers a chance for rehabilitation. Offenders engaged in community service can contribute positively to society, learn from their mistakes, thereby fostering a sense of responsibility and societal integration. Unlike incarceration, which can lead to social isolation and stigma, these alternatives help in maintaining family and community ties, essential for long-term reformation. 

However, the effectiveness of either approach depends on the context and nature of the crime. While community service is commendable for its rehabilitative potential, it might be perceived as too lenient for certain offenses, thereby undermining the law's authority. On the other hand, imprisoning individuals for minor infractions can lead to overcrowding in prisons and may not address the root causes of the crime.

In conclusion, while the argument for imprisoning all lawbreakers is rooted in the desire for a strict deterrent, the alternative of community service for minor offenses presents a more nuanced and potentially effective solution. It balances the need for punishment with opportunities for rehabilitation. In my opinion, the justice system should be flexible, tailoring punishments to the individual circumstances of each offense to achieve a fair and just society.

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相关词汇和语法结构

Appropriate Punishments   适当惩罚

Universal Imprisonment   普遍监禁

Powerful Deterrent   强大的威慑力

Alternatives to Incarceration   监禁以外的替代方案

Community Service   社区服务

Monetary Penalties  罚款

Rehabilitation   康复

Societal Integration   社会整合

Social Isolation and Stigma   社会孤立和耻辱感

Tailoring Punishments   量身定制惩罚

Fair and Just Society   公平正义的社会