写作范文解析

利弊类大作文，科技类话题

Computers enable people to be able to work at home and children to study at home. Some people believe that it is convenient and cost-saving. Do you think the phenomenon positive or negative? 

题目来源：2008年11月8日大陆雅思大作文

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题目大意

电脑使人们能够在家工作，孩子们能够在家学习。有些人认为这既方便又节省成本。您认为这种现象是积极的还是消极

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思路解析

这是一道利弊类大作文，聊的是电脑使人能在家工作学习的利弊。利弊类大作文需要强调在论证上体现合理性，即在具体的分析中，明确能体现出一边的论述的确是大于另一边，或是利弊均等，而利弊是否有说服力并不取决于观点的数量，而是内容是否有说服力。审题时注意一点，一是题目中明确了提到了“家长”和“孩子”两个主体，因此在论证时需要分别提及。下面，小航和大家一起来看下具体观点。

首先来看好处，有三方面。

一是使用计算机在家工作或学习为人们提供了极大的灵活性。作者可以根据自己的日程安排工作时间，不必局限于传统的办公时间；学生可以按照自己的学习节奏进行，不受课堂进度的限制。

二是远程工作和学习可以节省通勤费用和时间。对于当事人或学生来说，长期在家工作或学习可以减少每月的交通费用和花在路上的时间，也不必考虑异地工作或上学所产生的住宿费用。

三是有利于环境保护，由于可以在家办公学习，减少了每日的上下班和学校的往返，因此汽车的使用量大大减少，进而降低了废气排放。

再来看负面影响，同样有三方面。

一是在家工作可能导致工作和生活之间的界限变得模糊。有些人可能会发现很难在工作和休息之间划清界限，从而导致工作压力增加。

二是对于工作党来说，在家工作效率可能会更低。一方面工作期间可能会受到家庭干扰或缺乏自律，另一方面缺乏面对面交流可能导致误解和沟通障碍，这些因素都会导致工作效率变低甚至出错。

三是对于学生来说，在家学习的效果可能不如传统的课堂学习。虽然在线教育为学生提供了许多资源，但与老师和同学面对面的交流可能对某些学生更有益，同时缺少了有效监督会导致一些自律能力差的学生的学习效果大大下滑。

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高分范文示例

As technological advancements continue to proliferate, an increasing number of individuals are opting to work and study from the comfort of their homes. This shift has garnered both praise and criticism alike. In this discourse, I shall endeavor to elucidate the rationale behind opposition to this trend, subsequently highlighting its merits in order to substantiate my advocacy for offering such options in professional and educational settings.

There is a potential for adverse effects on productivity and learning efficacy when individuals choose to work or study from home. Certain individuals may struggle to establish an appropriate schedule, potentially leading to an overwhelming accumulation of tasks or even the failure to meet critical deadlines. Furthermore, communication challenges may arise in the absence of face-to-face interactions, as conveying nuanced information with precision and clarity can prove difficult. Text-based communication may inadvertently foster misunderstandings or discord among colleagues, given the absence of vocal tone and inflection. Moreover, while video calls offer a viable alternative, they may become burdensome when employed for trivial matters that occur frequently. In the context of online education, video-conferencing may hinder educators' abilities to gauge student comprehension and engagement, while also impeding peer-to-peer discussions among students.

It is crucial to emphasize that working and studying remotely are elective rather than obligatory. One of the most salient benefits of this arrangement is the provision of increased autonomy and choice for individuals. For particular categories of workers, such as freelancers, telecommuting facilitates a more adaptable and dynamic schedule. Consequently, these workers can optimize their efficiency, while also allocating time for personal pursuits, familial obligations, and domestic responsibilities. Companies that offer remote working options may experience an uptick in employee satisfaction as well. Additionally, remote working and distance learning can curtail daily expenses related to commuting and exorbitant housing costs in metropolitan areas. The savings accrued from reducing office or school space and utility expenses may enable organizations and educational institutions to enhance employee benefits and support services.

In conclusion, although remote working and learning may engender communication challenges, these modalities provide notable advantages for individuals with strong self-discipline and those who find traditional work or educational environments stifling. Consequently, the crux of the matter lies in affording individuals the choice to work or study from home, should they so desire.

范文作者：天乐 & Sophia

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相关词汇和语法结构

attract criticism   招致批评

backlog   工作积压

compulsion   强迫

freelancer   自由职业者

telecommuting   远程办公

flexible/agile schedule   灵活的时间表

commute   通勤

feel out of one’s element   无法适应环境

proliferate   扩散

elucidate   阐明

vocational tone and inflection   职业语调和声调变化

gauge student comprehension   评估学生理解

salient benefits   显著好处

exorbitant housing costs   高昂的住房成本

metropolitan areas   大城市地区